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经常给些考GRE的同学改作文,今天发一篇比较典型的给大家参考
。 希望能给GRE考生一些帮助!
经常给些考GRE的同学改作文,今天发一篇比较典型的给大家参考
。希望能给GRE考生一些帮助!
TOPIC: ISSUE11 - All nations should help support the
development of a global university designed to engage students
in the process of solving the worlds most persistent social
problems.
It is attempting to agree with the speaker by the nice
prospect he describes to us: scholars from all nations come to a
global university and cooperate to solve the worlds most
persistent social problems. (我觉得这个句子有些啰嗦,可以改为It is
attempting to agree with the speaker by the nice prospect that
scholars from all nations come to a global university and
cooperate to solve the worlds most persistent social
problems.)However, under (the)current international
environment, that dream could hardly be realized. Before it
fulfill(achieving) its goal, it could first cause numerous social
problems.
Admittedly, many potential social hazards such as
environment problems and poverty gap are ubiquitous in most
areas, and solving those problems is far beyond one or a few
countries’ competence. The achivements of(made by)
International Committee of the Red Cross and International
Environment Protection Orgnization have substaintiated the the
effectiveness of international cooperation. Thus it is considerable
to establish a globle university if it could be free from any interve
nor.(这个句子可能是我们的思路有偏差,我无法理解,所以无法评论)I
n that university, students from different countries could
exchange ideas and experience, and thus get a more
comprehensive view of those issues. Integrating different
techniques, they might conceive original and effective methods
to solve the persistent social
problems(上下文一直在重复这句话,可以改为 achieve the ends).
GRE写作向来是考生们的一大弱项之一,GRE作文辅导班班、24课
时GRE作文批改辅导班,让你的GRE作文高于4分。36课时作文批改辅
导班,让你的GRE作文提高到4.5分以上。
上面一段话,你做出让步,但是就这篇文章而言,我觉得让步段放
在倒数第二段比较好,
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