2012届高考英语书面表达图画式作文专题指导课件.ppt

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * 第一内容要点方面 作者较好地完成了试题规定的任务，涵盖了所要表达的主要内容。但是文章长度大大超出了规定的字数（多达239个），按评分标准要扣分，所以只能判为四档（16-20分）。对照片的描述到位，但是过于啰嗦。在“结合自身实际，谈感想，举例说明”中都有好的表现，但是发挥得太多，反而适得其反。 第二词汇运用方面 运用了不少高级词汇。比如：remove…from, ignored, concentrate on, take actions, be occupied with, relaxed等等。 但要注意有些高级词汇的运用要规范。如： ⑼ They need us to help them relieve from so much burden. 要改为：We should relieve them of too much burden. 词汇运用基本准确（但是要避免像gorl应为girl,pround应为proud这样的拼写方面的低级错误）。 第三句型结构方面 作者所运用的语法结构基本准确能够满足任务的要求。 全文共17句，用了7个复合句。复合句中三大从句“名词性从句、定语从句、状语从句”都有。简单句、并列句和复合句的交替使用使文章的可读性增强。 注意运用非谓语动词:help remove, tired, moving, having seen, make them feel relaxed等等。 由此可见：非谓语动词和复合句的运用是该文的亮点。 但某些句子明显就是中文式的句子。如： ⑿ Just like help giving them a hand when they are doing housework... 要改为：For example, we should give them a hand when they are doing housework… 第四行文结构方面 作者应用了一些词语间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。本文达到了预期的写作目的。 四档范文的修改 The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children. As it is illustrated in this picture, the tired mom just went home from work. The little girl helps remove her mother’s heavy bag from her shoulder. The mother is looking at her good girl with a smile while the little girl is also wearing a smile. She feels delightful and proud that she can do something for her mother. It is just a moving picture. Seeing the touching picture, I realize that I always think much of myself but less of my parents. As their child, I seldom concentrate on what they need and feel. Now I think we should relieve them of too much burden. For example, we should give them a hand when they are doing housework. What’s more, we can also tell them some funny jokes to make them feel relaxed when they are tired or worried. In a word, it is our duty to share parents’ daily burden.(153words) 实例二 请根据下面四幅图画内容，写一篇短文，记述昨天发生在你叔叔身上的事。 注意：1.词数150左右。2.参考词汇：吊销驾照　 revoke a driving license